Love Despoiled

Oh, Henry! You’ve caught me
be-twix and be-tween.
Passion whet by champagne,
and Kit Kat Club ambience.
Desire kindled by kindness.
Your patience to consummate
pledge your troth, to wed
and only then to bed.

Until my evening gown mishap.
Bared breast revealed,
milky way to pale mounds
meant to share in nuptial bliss.
When moonlight shafts
soften look of aging skin,
light passion’s fire,
scorch through satin linens.

But shocked I am.
Your snickers, chuckles,
leering eyes, pupils wide.
Your lust apparent, unleashed.
Tongue swiftly swipes your lips
sweat beads drip down furrowed brow.
You, most definitely,
are not my Mr. Good Bar.

Fifth Avenue class and demeanor
slipped away as if a mask.
I see you now, the real you.
As far out of possibilities
as aliens from planet Mars.
Bar or not, I sand beside this stool,
proud woman, intelligent,
genteel and steeled.

Beware sir, I am not
a pay day or pay by night
loose female, giving on demand.
I am not that kind.
I thought you were different.
And so I leave you sir,
clutching cloth to breast
virture intact.

Self respect intact,
yesterday, today,
and through many morrows.
Until some partner shall appear,
unconditional love apparent.
And we shall reveal to one another
our feelings, wishes, and regrets.
Our every view into our very souls.


I’m hosting Tuesday Poetics at dVerse today, the virtual pub for poets, and we’re brand name noodling! I’ve given folks three categories: candy bars, cereals, and perfumes. I’ve listed at least sixteen products in each category. Folks are to choose ONE category, and write a poem that includes at least TWO of the product names within that category. . . using them as just words in the poem. 

I’ve chosen to used the candy bar list: Oh, Henry!, Chuckles, Kit-Kat, Snickers, Milky Way, Mr. Goodbar, Mars Bar, 5th Avenue, Pay Day, Mounds, Twix, Charleston Chew, Butterfinger, Baby Ruth, Krackle, and 3 Muskateers. I used the first 11 in this poem.


46 thoughts on “Love Despoiled

  1. Frank Hubeny May 15, 2018 / 3:12 pm

    Nice use of all those words. Apparently “Desire kindled by kindness” may not always bring one a Mr. Good Bar.

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    • lillian May 15, 2018 / 3:14 pm

      Smiling I am at your reply here! Ah….the sweetness of candy bards….er, I mean bars 🙂

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  2. kim881 May 15, 2018 / 3:16 pm

    Amazing Lill! You’ve used 11 items from the list of sweets and made me chuckle and snicker at the ‘evening gown mishap’! I imagine this story as a black and white silent movie.

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    • lillian May 15, 2018 / 3:18 pm

      Oh yes…….that would be exactly the period for it! 🙂 And a lot of rolling eyes! 🙂

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      • kim881 May 15, 2018 / 3:21 pm

        Which actress would you choose to play the bare-breasted flapper?

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      • lillian May 15, 2018 / 3:30 pm

        If I could put a more modern actress in the role, slip her back in time to those days, the first one who comes to mind is Goldie Hawn. Although she’d be “ditzy” and not elegant. You’d need a combination I think….perhaps Lillian Gish? 🙂


  3. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) May 15, 2018 / 3:45 pm

    Oops… mine could almost be written from the opposite perspective… no Mr Good bar actually… ha. Love all the names you have managed to include… perfumes were much easier to include.

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    • lillian May 15, 2018 / 3:51 pm

      Well….this guy turned out not to be her Mr. Goodbar…..his true character popped out with her dress malfunction!


  4. Jane Dougherty May 15, 2018 / 3:46 pm

    This is silent film stuff and the I imagine the chocolate bar wrappers dropped on the floor and the jaws chewing as they watch 🙂

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  5. Vivian Zems May 15, 2018 / 3:57 pm

    Lillian! You took this to perfection. A lovely tale with a good morale; all revealed only within true love. Love it!

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    • lillian May 15, 2018 / 3:59 pm

      Thanks, Vivian. Glad you enjoyed! It was a fun one to write. I’m thinking I may do a second and give the cereals a try as no one has done that yet. I’d get some kix out of it 🙂

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    • lillian May 15, 2018 / 9:15 pm

      So glad. Really fun to work with these. Didn’t know how the prompt would go — but it’s been fun to read the results.


  6. Raivenne May 15, 2018 / 8:03 pm

    Oh so brilliantly done! And saw what you did there with the Mars Bar . I adore it!

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    • lillian May 15, 2018 / 9:17 pm

      Glad you caught that. Fun to work with all these words 🙂 Glad you enjoyed!


  7. Truedessa May 15, 2018 / 9:56 pm

    A great story poem and you have incorporated so many delicious words! A fun prompt.

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  8. Mary (tqhousecat) May 15, 2018 / 10:10 pm

    I guess he was not Mr Goodbar! Sad that many like that could exist! I commend you for your use of these sweet additions!

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    • lillian May 16, 2018 / 9:31 am

      Yes….Victorian Age, age of the Silent Movie, 50s, 60s, any decade….it can be a challenge to find Mr. Goodbar 🙂


    • lillian May 16, 2018 / 9:31 am

      Smiling I am at your comment. Glad you enjoyed!


  9. Janice May 16, 2018 / 10:50 am

    You went to town with this one Lillian! “Oh Henry!” what a great opening and I love the Kit Kat club and not my Mr Good Bar…and so on 🙂

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    • lillian May 16, 2018 / 12:06 pm

      So fun to play with words. I really didn’t know how folks would respond to this prompt….but there are so many good writes and so many really seem to have had a fun time with it! 😉

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  10. lynn__ May 16, 2018 / 11:12 am

    Wonderful noodling, Lillian! …and the lady leaves, virtue (spelling?) intact 🙂

    Liked by 1 person

    • lillian May 16, 2018 / 12:07 pm

      Thanks, Lynn. When I wrote up this prompt last week….I had no idea how folks would respond…or what I would even do with it. But so many have risen to the challenge and had some fun with words. I’m always happy to hand out smiles 🙂

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  11. Laura Bloomsbury May 16, 2018 / 11:51 am

    this is most mouthwatering Lilian! So clever the way you melted these chocolate bars together – Kit-Kat club especially

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    • lillian May 16, 2018 / 12:08 pm

      Ah, thank you, Laura. It was a fun one to write.


  12. Jo-Anne Teal May 17, 2018 / 12:00 am

    This may have been a fun prompt but you took the poetry seriously and created both story and character. And, your talented use of Mr Good Bar was particularly fabulous.

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    • lillian May 17, 2018 / 8:55 am

      Thanks so much Jo-Anne. When I first wrote this prompt, I had no idea what folks would do with it or what I would do with it! But it looks like lots of people had fun with it….it’s been a pleasure reading all the posts. So glad you enjoyed this one – the prompt and my post! 🙂

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  13. mhmp77 May 17, 2018 / 2:56 am


    And we shall reveal to one another
    our feelings, wishes, and regrets.
    Our every view into our very souls.

    There seems to be a high level of understanding between them and wanting to please each other. Great close Lillian!


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    • lillian May 17, 2018 / 8:56 am

      Thanks, Hank. I went narrative on this one……these last lines seem to me to be the idea of unconditional love, right? 🙂 Glad you enjoyed.


  14. MNL May 18, 2018 / 3:38 pm

    great use of the candybars. love the narrative poem, the different emotions she tumbled through


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