Prosery I

She stumbled through life, nomadic in her search for meaning. Somehow alone when surrounded by others. Even more alone with the one identified by many, as her true love. She finally fled the good life in New York City, to homestead in Montana. Cleared the land, blisters budding on calloused hands. Days passed into nights and nights into days. She savored their rhythm, beginning to understand who she was. Only then did she put pen to paper . . .

. . . Please know, we never could be, even when we were. My voice was too matched to yours. I am not who you heard or saw. I never was. Do not search for me. When far away, an interrupted cry reminds you of that last night, please know that cry, from wherever it comes, is my spirit thanking you, for letting go.

Word Count: 144. Written for dVerse, the virtual pub for poets. Today Bjorn hosts, and begins, a new category of writing for dVerse: Prosery. Prosery is similar to Flash Fiction, but with a dVerse spin! Writers must write a piece of fiction with 144 words or less, that includes a particular line of poetry, provided by the dVerse host. For the inaugural Prosery prompt, Bjorn asks us to include the line “When far away an interruped cry” taken from the poem acquainted with the night by Robert Frost.

41 thoughts on “Prosery I

  1. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) June 10, 2019 / 3:02 pm

    Oh I love how you wrote this.. a tender farewell… where the writer couldn’t be tethered, the line you have used so well, dividing it with that comma… excellent.

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    • lillian June 10, 2019 / 6:46 pm

      Thanks, Bjorn. I always know I’ve “hit it” if I get a positive response from you 🙂 LOVE the addition of Prosery to dVerse!

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    • lillian June 10, 2019 / 6:47 pm

      Thank you, Carol. So glad you enjoyed!

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  2. kim881 June 10, 2019 / 4:08 pm

    I love the way you evoke the feeling of loneliness, Lill, the hard work conveyed through the phrase ‘blisters budding on calloused hands’, and the sadness of the message.

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    • lillian June 10, 2019 / 6:47 pm

      Thanks, Kim. I do love flash fiction! A fun prompt to work with. Glad you liked this one.

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  3. Victoria Stuart June 10, 2019 / 4:09 pm

    Ah, this is beautiful. I love the perspective that the one many identified as the true love is actually something preventing growth.

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    • lillian June 10, 2019 / 6:48 pm

      That does happen, right? I’ve always thought that the challenge of any relationship is staying true to oneself at the same time one is becoming a part of two.

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  4. msjadeli June 10, 2019 / 4:23 pm

    I like the way you split this up, Lillian, with part of it as a letter to the one left behind.

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    • lillian June 10, 2019 / 6:49 pm

      Thanks! I always enjoy writing flash fiction! So glad dVerse is starting to include prosery!

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      • msjadeli June 10, 2019 / 8:40 pm

        You are welcome and ditto 🙂

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    • lillian June 10, 2019 / 6:50 pm

      Thank you, Nathan. Your comment is truly appreciated!

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  5. Charmed Chaos June 10, 2019 / 4:27 pm

    Lillian, this is a wonderful story. Isn’t it strange how you can feel alone with people surrounding you?

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    • lillian June 10, 2019 / 6:50 pm

      Oh yes…..feeling alone in a crowd of people….or with one other person. Alone doesn’t have to be only one.

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  6. Glenn Buttkus June 10, 2019 / 5:03 pm

    Perfect Flash Fiction; lots of stuff between the lines, letting us pine for more; hyet you gave us just enough. This\ premise works all the way back to “Six Word Stories”. Once you hook the reader, their imagination fills in the gaps.

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    • lillian June 10, 2019 / 6:51 pm

      Ah ha! Was it Hemingway who wrote the original 6 word short story about the baby shoe?

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    • lillian June 10, 2019 / 6:52 pm

      Thank you, Vivian. So very glad you enjoyed this one. I do love writing flash fiction.

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  7. adda June 10, 2019 / 6:12 pm

    Awesome! I love the way you tell the story…

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    • lillian June 10, 2019 / 6:45 pm

      Thanks, Adda. I’ve always loved flash fiction….fun to add it to our dVerse prompts!

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  8. gillena cox June 10, 2019 / 8:27 pm

    The lonliness rven among many workes well in countinung the story to letter form. Nice
    Happy Monday

    Much❤✏❤love

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  9. Frank J. Tassone June 10, 2019 / 8:31 pm

    A beautiful story that reads like the best of prose-poetry. Marvelous!

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  10. Margaret Elizabeth Bednar June 10, 2019 / 8:58 pm

    Nice use of the assigned line and I like how the last part is penned in a letter! Well done and full of emotion.

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  11. rothpoetry June 10, 2019 / 9:39 pm

    Sometimes the loss is the gain! Love your story of a strong woman taking charge of her life!

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  12. Grace June 11, 2019 / 8:41 am

    Love the ending Lillian which speaks of a deep appreciation for life, starting over and letting go.

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  13. rivrvlogr June 11, 2019 / 10:01 am

    Nice placement of the key line. It fits so well with the mood of your story.

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  14. Anna June 11, 2019 / 11:34 am

    Yes, you built a whole world around the line, beautifully done!

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  15. memadtwo June 11, 2019 / 12:40 pm

    Bonds can strangle as well as embrace. (K)

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  16. signedbkm June 11, 2019 / 7:13 pm

    sometimes we need to be let go…and sometimes we need to be taken in…it is that balance that is the most difficult to find when we find ourselves…bkm

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  17. Linda Kruschke June 12, 2019 / 12:02 am

    I love the structure of this. The action followed by the letter. The hope, the strength, and the tenderness all rolled into 144 words. Simply beautiful.

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  18. michnavs June 13, 2019 / 12:07 am

    A bitter -sweet farewell..i love how it..

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  19. Nina June 15, 2019 / 12:22 pm

    Such a beautiful use of the prompt to express such a sad goodbye~♥

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