Footprints disappear
in cool damp sand ridges
as low tide changes course.
Sun light
does a glisten dance,
as waters disappear in clouds.
We share our solitude,
grateful for the off-season
to rediscover love.
Written for dVerse where Victoria asks us to rewrite an older poem and add some imagery. The original Glisten is the first poem I posted when I began this blog in March 2015. Photo: Provincetown, on Cape Cod.
lillian the home poet 
Found the original and love the upgrade. Wonderful poem 2.0! Well done, Lillian!
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Thanks! Have been off grid since last Wednesday — back in town last night so reading this morning with my second cup — glad you enjoyed! I just did add the link to the original.
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a beautiful one…but I couldn’t find your first Glisten 😦
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Thank you, Sumana. Have been off-grid in the woods of the Adirondacks since last Wednesday. Just back to Boston last night and reading this AM. Added the link to the original now….if you’d like to read the first one do go ahead — er, really backwards since its’t the first poem I ever posted! 🙂
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Hi. I couldn’t find. Could you please come back and update your post with the original? thanks.
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Hi there! So sorry — forgot to link it to the original — which I just now did. Have been in the Adirondacks since Wednesday — gorgeous woods, lakes, black skies and huge stars — but no internet — or spotty in the rare moments of connectivity. But, am home now — just finished reading all the quadrilles and am catching up. Will get to Monday’s haibun in a bit. Hope you enjoy thei first Glisten too — written so long ago 🙂 It’s linked now in the explanation.
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I couldn’t find the original, either, Lillian, but do love this one. The phrase glisten dance is so perfect for what you are describing. I echo Toni and would love it if you would add the first one or provide a link to it. It’s so fun to see the progress!
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Ugh, Victoria. Apologies! I did not read the prompt completely as we were packing for our Adirondacks trip — scheduled the rewrite so it would appear while we were gone. Almost zero connetivity to internet in the Adirondacks but oh, the connection to the glory of the earth! Woods, the loons calling in the night, the blackest sky with the hugest stars. Wonderful wonderful.
So – back in Boston and caught up on Quadrille reading……..sipping my second cup here now. I did add the link in the explanation to the original poem. It was the first I ever posted and probably the 10th I ever wrote. It all started in February 2015 🙂 and the blog in March 2015. And then dVerse in December 2015. Joyful joyful! 🙂
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Oh, saw your “search” when I was leaving. My vote goes for the revision! Of course.
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Oops…didn’t see this post! Glad you enjoyed! 🙂
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Beautiful picture and revised poem Lillian. Love the rediscovering of love.
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Ah…I find I rediscover my self when out by the ocean, or as was the case these past 5 days, the Adirondack woods and serene lake. And yes, a rediscovery of the joy of two! 🙂
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Loved “glisten dance.” Wonderful poem.
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So glad you enjoyed! 🙂
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A beautiful revision!
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Thank you, Rosemary!
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I love that “sunlight does a glisten dance.” It’s one of those lines that will stay with me!
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Kink of like wearing sequins! 🙂
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Both poems are absolutely stunning 😀 and no I won’t pick a favorite as I feel that whatever we as poets write come directly from the heart… revised or otherwise ❤ its just something that we do… don’t we 😉
Lots of love,
Sanaa
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Ah, Sanaa, you are so wise! 🙂 Have been away for five days with no internet connection so did not get to read others’ in this prompt. Just getting back to the “world” as we know it — for me, that’s Boston. Glad to read your words here and so glad you enjoyed!
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The repetition in this poem not pulls the reader along but ties all the emotion together. Nicely done.
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So glad you enjoyed! 🙂
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Lillian,
the imagery you’ve conjured up here through your magical words is so perfect a reminder of how places change with the seasons and how we can embrace the changes not only in the seasons but in our lives-sometimes it’s not the change-it’s appreciating the things that are still the same, as your words so beautifully illustrate
this piece actually brought a tear to my eye as our firstborn prepares for her first college semester
I can feel autumn’s chill though it is still so very hot
am:)
hope all is well with both foot and family:)
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So nice to read your words with my second cup! Have been in the Adirondacks for 5 days with no internet connectivity — well, rarely sporadic so it basically was nonexistent. I must say, it was refreshing to be “away” from the world! But, nice to return too!
Ah yes….your autumn will truly bring a change of seasons in your life. Let the tears flow my friend, as you hug her goodbye….and know that you’ve done a wonderful job (although that’s not really the right word) of mentoring to this leaping off moment in time. She shall always be connected to you….just that the tether becomes a gossamer strand.
Will get back to my reading later today — or, with all the laundry I have, perhaps tomorrow! 🙂
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Lillian, you are quite the traveling lady!
Keith and I look forward to the day we can travel with abandon:)
hope you enjoyed and all is healing well-
I’m preparing to miss Caroline-so very fast-my goodness
enjoy your ‘pile’;) of domestic chores
but have plenty of coffee first;)
am:)
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