Star Song

lillian

one star per dance
beneath the sliver moon
come with me and be my love
one star per dance

one star per dance
your lips and mine shall meet
bodies meld together
one star per dance

one star per dance
look up and know my love
the galaxy forevermore
one star per dance

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It’s Poetic Tuesday at dVerse and  Mish asks us to become songwriters today, remembering to “lighten up our phrases to make them singable” — use repetition, create a refrain.  I’ll leave you to make up the tune! 🙂  Photo from pixabay.com

 

 

40 thoughts on “Star Song”

    • lillian's avatar lillian June 7, 2016 / 3:59 pm

      I can’t carry a tune for anything….but enjoyed doing this 🙂

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  2. Glenn Buttkus's avatar Glenn Buttkus June 7, 2016 / 3:18 pm

    This one is a pure romantic ballad. I can her Adele singing it. I went with a Leonard Cohen vibe on mine.

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    • lillian's avatar lillian June 7, 2016 / 4:01 pm

      Thanks Glenn, dancing I am. Will be reading in the AM with my beloved cup of Joe.

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  3. jillys2016's avatar jillys2016 June 7, 2016 / 3:39 pm

    Hmmm – I vote for Hoagy Carmichael to do the comp on this one! Love it 🙂

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    • lillian's avatar lillian June 7, 2016 / 4:01 pm

      Thanks — so glad you enjoyed! 🙂

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  4. Mish's avatar Mish June 7, 2016 / 3:40 pm

    This really works, Lillian! I can hear it very clearly as a song. Beautiful!

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    • lillian's avatar lillian June 7, 2016 / 4:02 pm

      …and my hubby and I are still dancing! 🙂 Tone-deaf I am — but had fun with this one.

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  6. Rose Red's avatar Pleasant Street June 7, 2016 / 3:56 pm

    reeking with romance…sounds like a waltz

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    • lillian's avatar lillian June 7, 2016 / 4:04 pm

      Just so long as he holds me close — for a lifetime of stars 🙂

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    • lillian's avatar lillian June 7, 2016 / 4:08 pm

      Started out with very complex dance — so many words and tricky beat — the kind of dance you’d need footsteps on the floor in 12 different colors, right and left feet and curved lines for dips. Scrapped it and went with this little ditty — the simple idea of a lifetime of stars up there, one for each dance — and we’re still going strong! 🙂

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  9. Grace's avatar Grace June 7, 2016 / 5:09 pm

    Love the refrain too Lillian ~ I am singing along with you ~ 🙂

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    • lillian's avatar lillian June 7, 2016 / 9:17 pm

      Enough stars in the galaxy to have our love last forever! 🙂

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  11. Portofino's avatar Charley June 7, 2016 / 7:01 pm

    Celestial bodies, human bodies, dancing… sounds like a hit to me!

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    • lillian's avatar lillian June 7, 2016 / 9:18 pm

      I’ve got a ticket to dance — except in this instance it’s one star per dance and hey! There’s a whole galaxy out there 🙂

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      • Portofino's avatar Charley June 7, 2016 / 9:20 pm

        Keep dancing with the star in your life!

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    • lillian's avatar lillian June 7, 2016 / 9:19 pm

      Let’s strike up the small orchestra and take a whirl! 🙂

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    • lillian's avatar lillian June 7, 2016 / 9:20 pm

      ….and there’s an entire galaxy so we can dance forevermore! 🙂 Glad you enjoyed.

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    • lillian's avatar lillian June 7, 2016 / 9:21 pm

      Thanks for the fun reply here! 🙂 Time to kick up our heels? 🙂

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  18. katiemiafrederick's avatar katiemiafrederick June 8, 2016 / 11:38 pm

    Perchance a Dance WiLL
    SinG per SonG a SinG
    WiLL DancE As Cycle
    goeS on iN First aS liGht
    froM DaRk AS theN..
    BiG BanG SinGs..
    DancE
    aGaiN..:)

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  19. annell4's avatar annell4 June 9, 2016 / 1:43 pm

    I see you said, you cannot carry a tune, so let’s chant the words!

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    • lillian's avatar lillian June 9, 2016 / 2:08 pm

      Chanting I can do! 🙂 Great rhythm — just not good with the harmony!

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  20. Bryan Ens's avatar Bryan Ens June 10, 2016 / 8:23 am

    one star per dance…yes, that would allow for a lot of dancing! 🙂 Lovely piece!

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