It’s in the Doing

Once,
I wished
on a star.
Another time
a four leaf clover.
Eyes squeezed shut, breath held tight
twenty-one birthday candles
blown out from one huge sucked in puff.
But I’ve come to learn as I grow old,
it’s not in the wishing that dreams come true.

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Written for dVerse Poet’s Pub. Today, Victoria asks us to write an etheree, shaped by syllabic lines from 1 to 10. First line 1 syllable, second line 2 syllables, third line 3 syllables etc. up to the tenth line of 10 syllables. Quite fun to do!

51 thoughts on “It’s in the Doing

  1. Glenn Buttkus May 19, 2016 / 3:06 pm

    Nice rocking of the prompt, L. This was a fun adventure. I used to hate counting syllables, but thanks to dVerse, now it’s second nature.

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    • lillian May 19, 2016 / 6:32 pm

      I’ve never minded syllables — it was the rhyming I didn’t do and when I did it was “blue” with “true” with “you” until dVerse. Found out about the rhyming dictionary online and all the forms…Now I enjoy the challenge. Glad you enjoyed this one!

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      • lillian May 22, 2016 / 8:27 am

        Viv: I just bookmarked B-Rhymes —- many thanks! 🙂 I was using something else — this looks great.

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    • lillian May 19, 2016 / 6:33 pm

      Well, wishing is the romantic thing to do and I’m all for romance and hocus locus — just not as a determining factor! 🙂

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  2. Mary May 19, 2016 / 3:07 pm

    So very true. Wishing has to be accompanied by action….and a touch of luck as well. Smiles!

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    • lillian May 19, 2016 / 6:33 pm

      I agree. Being in the right place at the right time also helps 🙂

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  3. Victoria C. Slotto May 19, 2016 / 3:13 pm

    There’s a bit of a similarity in our poems today, Lillian…those dreams that demand our response. Love the image, too.

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  4. Sanaa Rizvi May 19, 2016 / 4:20 pm

    Lovely work on the etheree form Lillian ❤ and yes our dreams are fulfilled when we chase them 😉 Beautifully executed (as always)

    Lots of love,
    Sanaa

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    • lillian May 19, 2016 / 6:34 pm

      Yes, we do need to run a bit to catch them! 🙂 Glad you enjoyed.

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  5. Misky May 19, 2016 / 5:13 pm

    No harm in a bit of wishing as long as you know that dreams are just that – dreams.

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    • lillian May 19, 2016 / 6:35 pm

      So true — we had a saying with our children: “you make your own luck” —

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  6. kim881 May 19, 2016 / 5:16 pm

    That’s the joy of a wish – you never know if it will come true! maybe that falling star will be the one…

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    • lillian May 19, 2016 / 6:36 pm

      Ah I love the romantic notion of wishing upon a star — and dreams come true, sometimes with a little help from our determination!

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  7. Grace May 19, 2016 / 5:43 pm

    I don’t mind wishing…nothing wrong with doing this but if you want to get it, you must act on it ~ Love the form Lillian ~

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    • lillian May 19, 2016 / 6:36 pm

      Exactly! 🙂 Interesting the thoughts folks have on wishing and dreaming….

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  8. hypercryptical May 19, 2016 / 5:53 pm

    Wise words but still wishing gives a certain type of hope.
    Anna :o]

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    • lillian May 19, 2016 / 6:37 pm

      I am always for wishing and hoping 🙂 I think many an invention was made on a dream.

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  9. Walt Wojtanik May 19, 2016 / 7:12 pm

    Love the wisdom in this, Lillian! Wishing is usurped by the living!

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    • lillian May 19, 2016 / 7:51 pm

      So glad you enjoyed. I must admit, I still enjoy wishing on the first start I see … wishes are dreams waiting to come true — and we just usually need to push a bit! 🙂

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  10. Truedessa May 19, 2016 / 8:02 pm

    I believe in a bit of luck, but sometimes you have to chase those dreams..put on the running shoes and go…this form is going to be fun to read tonight.

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    • lillian May 19, 2016 / 8:17 pm

      …one foot in front of the other….go for it! 🙂

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  11. Candy May 19, 2016 / 8:43 pm

    wishing can be the start of a fantastic journey
    this is a fantastic Etheree 😉

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    • lillian May 19, 2016 / 8:51 pm

      Wishing names the dream — the doing claims it. 🙂 Glad you enjoyed.

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  12. jillys2016 May 19, 2016 / 10:05 pm

    The big, bad huffing and puffing of youth contrasts so well in the culmination of your delightful poem!

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    • lillian May 22, 2016 / 8:30 am

      Thanks, Jilly. Out of town this weekend and till Tuesday…so just getting to respond and will get some reading done today. Family reunion here — not so much time for my poetry writing or reading — back i full swing on Wednesday.

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  13. Bodhirose May 19, 2016 / 10:54 pm

    I do believe that what we end up with can sometimes begin with a dream. A nice way to set your intention before you bring it into fruition. And I’m wondering, did any of the dreams of that 21 year old come true? 😉 Lovely, Lillian!

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    • lillian May 22, 2016 / 8:31 am

      You’re exactly right….the dreams starts in the wishing, the intention. Think of all those patents that started like this — from a dreamer! 🙂 Glad you enjoyed.

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  14. B. E. Adalgari May 20, 2016 / 12:14 am

    This piece has such a gentle wisdom in it. Everything about it is quiet; subtle. The melancholy just leaking in at the edges, held at bay by the determined hopefulness of the final line. Without actually -naming- any colors, the poem is full of them. The glitter of the stars, the fresh green clover, the candles, like the stars, shining, but with an earthier, more familial warmth…

    I also loved the photo. Thanks for this lovely post 😀

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    • lillian May 22, 2016 / 8:39 am

      What a wonderful reply….many many thanks! So very glad you enjoyed!

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  15. petrujviljoen May 20, 2016 / 11:19 am

    I enjoyed the concentration and having to find and replace words without losing one’s theme’s focus. Was previously too intimidated to do MTB but am learning a lot though it. I should tell this to Victoria too!

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  16. Mish May 20, 2016 / 6:08 pm

    Wow, isn’t that the truth! Wise words, Lillian. 🙂

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    • lillian May 22, 2016 / 8:41 am

      Start with a wish………comes true with helping it along bit! 🙂 Glad you enjoyed.

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  17. katiemiafrederick May 20, 2016 / 6:40 pm

    SMiLes.. iN thE beGinNinG
    A FrUiT.. aN APPle tHen
    aN ioN FoR
    FruiTioN
    chiLd oF
    VicTorY
    iN juST
    DoiN’
    iT
    iN
    Nike
    FasHioN…;)

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    • lillian May 22, 2016 / 8:42 am

      Many thanks, Charley. Happy you liked it!

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  18. Rosemary Nissen-Wade May 21, 2016 / 4:52 am

    Succinct wisdom, with a touch of sweet nostalgia.

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    • lillian May 22, 2016 / 8:42 am

      Glad you enjoyed it, Rosemary. A fun prompt!

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    • lillian May 22, 2016 / 8:43 am

      Is’t that the truth! Like finding the genie in a bottle 🙂

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