Why hast thou forsaken me?

…and Namrah spread his wings as I clung tightly to his undulating spine. He took me to the place last inhabited by my kind.

He landed on dry encrusted earth; trails of criss-crossed steel nearby. His massive head nodded to the open door and he watched as I ventured in. Rows and rows of emptiness. Benches of once polished oak, gathering the dust of ages. A transport station. Hope long since depleted.

Tears streamed from my eyes as I sought Namrah’s fold. With a keening guttural dirge, his one tear joined mine. And he lifted me, soaring, into the clouds.

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Word Count:  100.  Written for Rochelle Wisoff-Fields’ Friday Fictioneers. Rochelle is the master of flash fiction (a story of 100 words or less) and challenges writers each week with a photo, posted on Wednesdays. Photo credit: J Hardy Carroll.  Stop by and see some of the tales garnered from this photo!

36 thoughts on “Why hast thou forsaken me?

  1. Charley May 18, 2016 / 8:36 pm

    A wonderful flash piece! I’m old-school. I want the backstories. That means, I like it muchly!

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    • lillian May 19, 2016 / 6:55 am

      Smiling I am, Charley, over my morning cup and your words here!

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      • Charley May 19, 2016 / 7:48 am

        Always glad to give away a smile! They tend to come back of their own accord.

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  2. Nan Mykel May 18, 2016 / 9:04 pm

    With a keening guttural dirge, his one tear joined mine….I could go swimming in that sentence! Really powerful! I love it!

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  3. Nan Mykel May 18, 2016 / 10:32 pm

    I’ve written a flash fiction to the photo but don’t know how to get it to the correct place. Do I need to add the photo?

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    • lillian May 18, 2016 / 10:36 pm

      Hi Nan: Yes you need to include the photo with the photo credit. Click on my link and you’ll come to the site with the prompt. There’s a little rectangle there, similar to (or it may be) Mr. Linky — the first time you use it, you may have to click on the box/statement below it that says something like “get a link…” and that spot will direct you as to how to get the link — hope this helps. Also, you can click on the photo, click again till it’s on your screen, then go to Save As and save it to your desktop….then you can pull it in to your WP media library to include with your post. Hope all this helps. If you need extra help, just email me.

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  4. maria May 19, 2016 / 12:56 am

    Oh, where should I start. I love your vivid descriptions filled with emotions. I especially love these lines: “Rows and rows of emptiness. Benches of once polished oak, gathering the dust of ages. A transport station. Hope long since depleted.”

    Nicely done, Lillian. 😀

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    • lillian May 19, 2016 / 6:37 am

      So glad you enjoyed, Maria! Nice to see you this morning over my first morning cup!

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    • lillian May 19, 2016 / 6:38 am

      Quite desolate, right? And I imagine folks, hopeful to leave … and then something happened and all are gone. Hope depleted.

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  5. d3athlily May 19, 2016 / 2:45 am

    I’m enthralled by your incredible words and images. They add so much vibrancy to the story. I wish I had more. ☺

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    • lillian May 19, 2016 / 6:46 am

      Isn’t that the way with these 100 word stories? Sometimes you just get into them and then end! So glad you enjoyed.

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    • lillian May 19, 2016 / 6:47 am

      Could be. Definitely some type of mythical creature….unusual with an undulating spine! Glad you enjoyed.

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  6. AnnMarie Roselli-Kissack May 19, 2016 / 5:56 am

    My, my Lillian –
    your words here move expressly from vacant station to a living, breathing world in need of more beauty such as these words provide
    this piece is exquisite and reflects your artistic command of the language that is writing
    happy Thursday, my friend
    am:)

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    • lillian May 19, 2016 / 6:51 am

      🙂 this story started to evolve and I found myself wanting one of your drawings!!! Somehow, I think you’ve drawn Namrah before 🙂 Will be getting to my reading today — looking forward to some AM tales! 🙂

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      • AnnMarie Roselli-Kissack May 19, 2016 / 6:54 am

        here is a coupon for you
        “Lillian may use any of am’s drawings whenever her muse needs extra lines b/w or colored;)”
        happy Thursday
        am:)

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      • lillian May 19, 2016 / 7:02 am

        Oooh I LOVE coupons and this one is definitely the best! I treasure it and I’m certain I shall use it too 🙂

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  7. Misky May 19, 2016 / 6:44 am

    Wow. That’s the best way I can put it, Lillian. >

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    • lillian May 19, 2016 / 6:52 am

      Yeah….I enjoyed this one — my mind went a little off to another world 🙂

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      • Misky May 19, 2016 / 7:56 am

        One must go where one must go. 😀

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  8. rochellewisoff May 19, 2016 / 8:42 am

    Dear Lillian,

    Ethereal and lovely descriptions. A belated happy birthday.
    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  9. michael1148humphris May 19, 2016 / 12:02 pm

    Lost in an empty world, thank heavens she has Namrah

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    • lillian May 25, 2016 / 8:06 am

      Thank you so much. Glad you enjoyed.

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  10. gahlearner May 20, 2016 / 6:04 pm

    Wonderful. Where will she go now, the last of her kind? There is so much untold story in there, and more to come… I’d love to read it all.

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    • lillian May 25, 2016 / 8:04 am

      Just getting back from a family trip so back to my reading and responding. So glad you liked it! hmmmm food for thought in terms of writing more…

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