undone one

Double bed
two crowded,
they shifted to a king.
Never to touch again.

She said double or nothing,
hoping to return
to their double standard
sheets and colorful duvet.

He walked out the door,
double helix done.
One line veered off the path
unraveled, broken, gone.

Double-paned glass installed
shut out shout outs.
Final jeopardy achieved
immunity from pain.

Doubles life, double downed.
Left alone she was.
No one else.
None, no one but one.


NaPoWriMo Day 15: a poem that incorporates the idea of doubles.

25 thoughts on “undone one

  1. Waltermarks April 15, 2016 / 4:04 pm

    This reminds me of how we used to bunk, (and how we still do at her mom’s house). It’s true, bigger beds don’t make more intimate moments, very touching!

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    • lillian April 15, 2016 / 4:29 pm

      So glad you like it. One reply mentions the first stanza. I think that’s the poem within the poem. Should perhaps have stopped there but I do like to play with words๐Ÿ˜Š


    • lillian April 15, 2016 / 6:30 pm

      Ooooh, thank you for your kind words here! ๐Ÿ™‚


  2. Grace April 15, 2016 / 6:13 pm

    I admire the different interpretation to king or queen and to double :Doubles life, double downed.

    Very lovely write Lillian ~ However I have to tell you that during OLN, only 1 poem can be linked. At other times, we can write 2 or 3, but not during OLN. Kindly let me know which poem you like to stay put, and I will delete the other one.

    Happy Friday and wishing you happy weekend.

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    • lillian April 15, 2016 / 6:33 pm

      Oh my, Grace. My sincere apologies. Was not at all aware of this! Obviously a major faux pas on my part and not intended at all. Will not happen again. Can you please remove this one and leave up Life on the Wall — which was the original one intended for Open Link Night. I’ll remove the reference to dVerse in this poem as well. Thanks for you compliment….and your candor here! ๐Ÿ™‚


      • Grace April 15, 2016 / 6:52 pm

        No worries Lillian, we understand ~ If you note Bjorn’s post in the end, we always remind poets to link 1 poem only for OLN ~ This is a good read, so the pleasure is all mine (ours) ~

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    • lillian April 15, 2016 / 6:39 pm

      Thanks, Jennifer! It was a fun one to write.


  3. AnnMarie Roselli-Kissack April 16, 2016 / 6:51 am

    Morning Lillian
    in keeping with your theme – I read this twice;) your word turns are always so crisp and full of energy
    you manage to rise to each writing challenge in glorious style
    have a wondrous weekend

    Liked by 1 person

    • lillian April 16, 2016 / 7:49 am

      Sipping my second cup and smiling I am. Thanks, AM. I did go a bit overboard on this one but it was fun to see all the myriad types of “doubles” that exist! Weather here is supposed to be divine! Time for a walk along the Charles ๐Ÿ™‚


  4. Jane Dougherty April 16, 2016 / 8:30 am

    I think you’re right about the first stanza. It’s strong enough to stand alone, though I can see your enthusiasm in the subsequent stanzas ๐Ÿ™‚

    Liked by 1 person

  5. Imelda April 16, 2016 / 12:50 pm

    Very nice. The first stanza is quite strong in imagery and captivating.

    Liked by 1 person

    • lillian April 16, 2016 / 2:18 pm

      Ah Imelda. I’ve contemplating take the entire poem down and just leaving the first stanza. It really is a poem within a poem!

      Liked by 1 person

      • Imelda April 22, 2016 / 9:28 am

        I think it works both ways, but I understand your sentiment. It seems other commenters agreed with you. ๐Ÿ™‚

        Liked by 1 person

  6. jazzytower April 16, 2016 / 9:34 pm

    I especially liked the first and third stanza….feels very much like a glimpse into a life. Nice work!

    Liked by 1 person

    • lillian April 17, 2016 / 1:22 am

      Yes — I went a little crazy with my research on the term “double.” Go so enthralled that I got a little wordy in this one ๐Ÿ™‚

      Liked by 1 person

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