Forecast Error

Once delicately balanced
upturned to the sun,
finely veined plumeria petals
lie strewn across the path.

Last eve’s maelstrom winds
unexpected. Wreaked havoc.
Battering, felling
these blushing blooms.

Perfumed scent mingles
with rotting leaves.
They shall decay
and disappear.

I trusted you,
until you became another.


National Poetry Writing Month continues with day eleven’s prompt: write a poem in which you closely describe an object or place, and then end with a much more abstract line that doesn’t seemingly have anything to do with that object or place, but which, of course, really does. Photo Credit: Bert Grantges.

12 thoughts on “Forecast Error

  1. Misky April 11, 2016 / 1:35 pm

    Nice take on the prompt, Lillian. And I hope your weather has settled a bit!

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    • lillian April 11, 2016 / 7:09 pm

      Cold but sunny and bright. I’ll take it! Glad you liked this one.

      Liked by 1 person

  2. AnnMarie Roselli-Kissack April 11, 2016 / 5:13 pm

    love how this piece roots into a broken romance of human “nature”- I wasn’t expecting it – wonderful!
    and I must say I always look forward to both your single and collective word play
    thank you for ‘amping’ up my mental dictionary!

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    • lillian April 11, 2016 / 7:11 pm

      Smiling I am at your note that you weren’t expecting the ending. yep — it was supposed to be a “twist.” On to my glass of evening chardonnay! 🙂

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    • lillian April 12, 2016 / 12:08 am

      Ah, so glad you liked this one. Quite the twist at the end, eh? Sadly, there are far too many “plumeria” women in this world.


  3. Oloriel April 12, 2016 / 6:01 am

    Wonderful and relatable poem, I love the contrast between the scenery and the ending.

    Liked by 1 person

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