29 thoughts on “Tanka of Hurt

  1. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) March 15, 2016 / 5:15 pm

    Oh you went the same way as I did on my second… hands can do so much damage…. and always it’s the bruised who blames herself.


    • lillian March 16, 2016 / 9:06 am

      We need a differen “icon” from “like.” Yes — hands are powerful in so many ways and domestic abuse is something that too often hides behind closed doors and well manicured hands.


  2. Grace March 15, 2016 / 5:54 pm

    Ouch, that hand hurts ~ That first line is telling of an abusive relationship ~ Beautiful tanka Lillian ~

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    • lillian March 16, 2016 / 9:07 am

      Thank you, Grace. Too often the well applied make-up, designer sun glasses, or manicured nails can hide what really lurks behind.


    • lillian March 16, 2016 / 9:08 am

      Thank you……two very different sets of hands here. And sadly, the one most “decorated and divine” is the evil one.


    • lillian March 16, 2016 / 9:08 am

      I don’t know how to respond to this……I hope you are well and happy, my friend.


      • Pleasant Street March 16, 2016 / 9:36 am

        I guess I figured I could relate to what you had been through. Unless this is fiction


      • lillian March 16, 2016 / 9:59 am

        This scene itself is fiction….but all too true for so many. My mother had many many problems…and I witnessed and felt many of them. My dad was a quiet person…..not demonstrative at all. There was love in our household and that is what’s made me the person I am – choosing to share and show love. I think we are what we write…..and perhaps kernals of truth come out in even our fictionalized words. I hope to see you many more times……this “space” is so important and such an outlet for me….and for many. We are the words we choose.

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    • lillian March 16, 2016 / 9:09 am

      Thank you. Domestic abuse is something that lurks behind well decorated windows, smart suits, and soft hands. It can be so difficult to see….unless we really look.


  3. mishunderstood March 15, 2016 / 8:00 pm

    So much pain in this story. Keeping it short made an impact. Thanks for using the prompt to shed some light on the darker things in life.

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    • lillian March 16, 2016 / 9:10 am

      Thank you…….as I mentioned earlier…..very hard to use the “like” icon in response to a poem like this. Appreciate your kind words.


    • lillian March 16, 2016 / 9:11 am

      Nice to see you Walt. Glad you felt the emotion of this one.


  4. Mary March 15, 2016 / 8:45 pm

    Yes, the dark side! I can visualize those hands.

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    • lillian March 16, 2016 / 9:12 am

      Yes. The dark side comes to light…….would that it would in many instances……and healing occur.


  5. Aria March 15, 2016 / 9:26 pm

    This is fantastic.


  6. Bodhirose March 15, 2016 / 11:22 pm

    Hands like that leave deep, emotional scars. Well done, Lillian.

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    • lillian March 16, 2016 / 9:13 am

      Yes…..long after the scabs and bruises have healed, many hidden from view, the scars still remain for far too many.


  7. ShirleyB March 16, 2016 / 6:42 pm

    Bravo, Lillian. Life isn’t always rose-tinted – sometimes dark glass tinted.

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  8. hlhivy March 18, 2016 / 12:20 pm

    I love Tanka! Just taught my students and am expecting their poetry portfolios to be turned in next week! I know they won’t all be this polished, but some of them are actually finding out that they love poetry.

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    • lillian March 20, 2016 / 7:49 am

      Ah, that’s the most important thing! Teach them young that poetry can be fun! I always taught haiku first….then said, and if three lines just won’t do, try tanka! 🙂

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      • hlhivy March 20, 2016 / 11:18 am

        We did haiku, then tanka, and then renga – which they get a kick out of because once they pass their beginning along- it’s out of their hands and what comes back is a surprise.

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  9. katiemiafrederick March 29, 2016 / 1:53 am

    Cycles of bullied bullies
    and abuse.. all a story
    of empty souLs
    the ability
    to Love..
    perhaps the
    cycle is broken..
    extended families
    help in providing more
    opportunities for Love..:)


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