Another Bloody Case

“Look at the image there. You can see a very small patch of dark blue, framed by a little branch. Pinned up by a naughty starlet, our dead Ms. Ruby Lipps here. Looks like she was stabbed, then managed to turn around to face the call board. She reached up to touch that photo for some reason? That’s gotta be her blood trail down the board, down the wall, until she collapses here on the floor. By her hand, is that a bloody word? Maybe three letters? Looks like M, O or D? Then a T? Who keeps the schedule here? How many clients did she have tonight? Any employment records at this dump? What’s her real name? Next of kin? Let’s go, people. This is the third case like this in a week. Someone’s got it out for sex workers in this town.”

Image by Nicholas Panek from Pixabay

Written for Prosery Monday at dVerse, the virtual pub for writers around the globe.

Today Kim is our host. She asks us to insert the following lines from French Poet Jean Nicolas Arthur Rimbaud’s poem Novel, into the body of our piece of flash fiction of 144 words or less, sans title.

“There you can see a very small patch
of dark blue, framed by a little branch,
pinned up by a naughty star.”


We may change the punctuation in the lines, but the exact words and word order must be kept intact.

20 thoughts on “Another Bloody Case

  1. kim881's avatar kim881 October 7, 2024 / 3:05 pm

    I love where the prompt lines took you, Lill, especially as I’m on a bit of a crime thriller ride at the moment. I enjoyed your ‘bloody case’, the way it written as a monologue by your protagonist, and the echoes of Jack the Ripper.

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    • lillian's avatar lillian October 7, 2024 / 3:27 pm

      Glad you enjoyed, Kim. Took me a while to find an illustration for it….but this one works.

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      • kim881's avatar kim881 October 7, 2024 / 3:29 pm

        It does!

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  2. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli October 7, 2024 / 3:34 pm

    A serial killer on the loose. It doesn’t get much darker than that.

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  3. Ain - UA's avatar Ain October 7, 2024 / 4:36 pm

    Yes it echoes with the classical feel of the detective stories of classic days gone by, but it also is resplendent with the atmosphere of scandinoir, and I do enjoy atmosphere you created very much, reading it one gets those black n white film reels of those 1930s classics. Very good piece. The undercurrent is sad though, thesex worker being the target again…

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    • lillian's avatar lillian October 8, 2024 / 11:14 am

      Thank you, Ain. And yes, I agree….sad that the sex workers are far too often targets of killers and abusers.

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  4. pandamoniumcat's avatar pandamoniumcat October 7, 2024 / 7:31 pm

    It reminds me too of Jack the Ripper and those old detective stories. It’s always amazing where a prompt will take you. I love how you have written this we get so much of the story from the detectives point of view.

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    • lillian's avatar lillian October 8, 2024 / 11:14 am

      Thank you – and glad you enjoyed!

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  5. Stine Writing and Miniatures's avatar Stine Writing and Miniatures October 7, 2024 / 7:32 pm

    The theme of killing “ladies of the night” is very popular and it is hard to think about how they got there in the first place. How many chose that life? And Pretty Woman doesn’t count! Lol.

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    • lillian's avatar lillian October 8, 2024 / 11:15 am

      Pretty Wman does not count, for sure. Interesting question you pose: how many chose that life?

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      • Stine Writing and Miniatures's avatar Stine Writing and Miniatures October 15, 2024 / 5:20 pm

        I think perhaps for someone young and beautiful it would seem like “easy money” except there is so much more to that industry than anyone knows!

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  6. Helen's avatar Helen October 8, 2024 / 12:56 pm

    Love the direction you took! I love sleuthing … would love to assist!!!!

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  7. crazy4yarn2's avatar crazy4yarn2 October 8, 2024 / 6:39 pm

    Good one, Lillian! I love what you did with the prompt!

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  8. Carol C's avatar Carol C October 8, 2024 / 7:05 pm

    Now, that’s a piece of detective prose indeed! Sharp, and laying out the facts. Great writing Lillian!

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  9. Truedessa's avatar Truedessa October 11, 2024 / 9:02 am

    Intriguing and creative write! You should write a follow up piece as now my inner detective needs more clues. You have a crime thriller in the works.

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