She falters, steps lightly,
lightly asserting herself again.
Again he beats her, denies her being.
Being a brute, how can she win?

How did this happen,
happen to her, create such fear?
Fear is the impetus she finally needs.
Needs to act quickly, her path is clear.

Miles away she laughs aloud,
a loud guffaw that signals she’s free.
Free of his violence, while he lies dead,
dead by her deed near the old oak tree.

Written for dVerse, the virtual pub for poets around the globe. Grace asks us to consider Loop Poetry, a form created by Hellon. There are no restrictions on the number of stanzas nor on the syllable count for each line. However, in each stanza, the last word of the line 1 becomes the first word of line 2. The last word of line 2 becomes the first word of line 3. The last word of line 3 becomes the first word of line 4. This is followed for each stanza (4 line stanzas). The rhyme scheme is abcb. Tricky. Took me a while to get in the rhythm of it and for some reason, this poem from the dark side was the result.

8 thoughts on “Revenge

  1. Reena Saxena July 29, 2022 / 9:08 am

    Brutes don’t leave a choice at times, even if it lands her in jail.


  2. Ron. July 29, 2022 / 9:31 am

    Loopaliciously done. Conga rats


  3. Gillena Cox July 29, 2022 / 1:14 pm

    A loop well constructed



  4. Grace July 29, 2022 / 1:24 pm

    Well, I am glad for the happier ending, away from the violence. Love the loop poem Lillian. Have a good weekend.


  5. Leyde Ryan July 29, 2022 / 9:20 pm

    Ooooh, Powerful! Have to say I rather like it, though I’m glad I didn’t take the vengeance route myself😉


  6. msjadeli July 31, 2022 / 2:49 pm

    If only murder was the way to relieve oneself of such a brute… Maybe she will be able to heal in peace (even if in a prison cell.) A tale of courage and a first step towards liberation ❤


  7. tallisman September 1, 2022 / 1:52 am

    Clever stuff, really good!


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