A Christmas Carol

Like sparkling lights
I love you

like tart cranberry sauce
and chocolate mousse

smooth and sweet
and roast turkey

the day of and days after
and after that’s leftovers

like youthful kisses
I love those leftovers too

the you and me
season after season,
still savory good.

Written for dVerse, the virtual pub for poets where today Sarah asks us to write a response to a poem we’ve read in the past year. Below is the poem I modeled mine after. It appears in jelly roll, a collection of poems by African American poet Kevin Young, winner of the Patterson Poetry Prize and Finalist for the National Book Award. I tried to simulate his form and like him, used a type of music as the title. And yes, that’s my husband and I fifty years ago and obviously, much more recently!

by Kevin Young

Like hot food
I love you

like warm
bread & cold

cuts, butter

or, days later, after

when I want
whatever’s left

31 thoughts on “A Christmas Carol

  1. Grace January 5, 2021 / 3:12 pm

    How sweely delicious this is. Love the photos of both of you – still beaming with love & joy after all these years.

    Liked by 1 person

    • lillian January 5, 2021 / 3:57 pm

      Thank you, Grace. Love of my life still after all these years.


    • lillian January 5, 2021 / 3:59 pm

      Thank you, Sarah. This was interesting and challenging for me to follow the form of another poem. Not how I usually write…especially the 2-line stanzas. But that’s what dVerse is so often…a chance to not only express ourselves but to be challenged in our writing. Glad you enjoyed this one!


    • Markderek January 6, 2021 / 5:47 am

      Lovely ❤️


  2. sanaarizvi January 5, 2021 / 3:22 pm

    Oh my heart this is incredibly beautiful, Lillian! 😀 Love the photographs of you too, smiling and beaming at each other. A gem of a poem too! 💝💝💝

    Liked by 1 person

    • lillian January 5, 2021 / 4:00 pm

      Thank you, Sanaa. I was surprised when I looked at the photo on the right to find how similar it was in positioning etc to our wedding photo 🙂 Kind of fun!


  3. Misky January 5, 2021 / 3:28 pm

    Oh, really well done, Lillian. I’m so glad that you included your inspirational poem also.

    Liked by 2 people

    • lillian January 5, 2021 / 4:08 pm

      So glad you liked it. I figured I’d better include the poem that inspired this one….as the form of 2 lines to a stanzas is so completely different than the way I write…as is very little punctuation. I enjoyed the prompt and it was fun to use the two photos as well.

      Liked by 1 person

      • Misky January 5, 2021 / 4:42 pm

        I look forward to working with this prompt. I just hope there’s enough time to produce something.


    • Markderek January 6, 2021 / 5:45 am

      Awww 🥰


  4. msjadeli January 5, 2021 / 3:54 pm

    Nicely done, Lillian, and I love the “before” and “after 50” photos. Wonderful to have someone to share a life with and still be smiling ❤ ❤

    Liked by 2 people

    • lillian January 5, 2021 / 4:09 pm

      So glad you enjoyed the poem and the photos. Oh yes….the love of my life and I’ve often said since last March when this Covid made us all recluses, so glad I married my best friend (and a good cook!).

      Liked by 1 person

  5. Carol Congalton January 5, 2021 / 3:57 pm

    Beautiful love!

    Liked by 1 person

    • lillian January 5, 2021 / 4:09 pm

      Thank you! I’ve often said over these Covid months of seclusion, I’m so glad I married my best friend! 🙂

      Liked by 1 person

      • calmkate January 5, 2021 / 6:05 pm

        I’m sure that is the crucial point for lifelong relationships 🙂


    • lillian January 5, 2021 / 4:21 pm

      Hah! I make Julia Child’s recipe every year….it just melts in your mouth! It’s so good and so tempting when we have some leftover….that I deliberately only make it once a year! 🙂

      Liked by 1 person

  6. Beverly Crawford January 5, 2021 / 4:13 pm

    Such a beautiful portrayal of what a marriage can be, and all too seldom is. You are blessed.

    Liked by 1 person

  7. Glenn A. Buttkus January 5, 2021 / 5:34 pm

    Delicious, wonderful, heartfelt and bang on for duplicating the feel and style of your chosen poem.

    Liked by 1 person

  8. Ingrid January 6, 2021 / 1:14 am

    Just lovely, Lillian, and beautiful photographs which celebrate your love. I like the succinct, clipped style of both poems.

    Liked by 1 person

  9. kim881 January 6, 2021 / 4:48 am

    Thank you, Lill, for introducing me to Kevin Young, a poet I had not heard of. You have successfully simulated his form and title. You had my mouth watering with the ‘tart cranberry sauce and chocolate mousse’! I especially love the lines:
    ‘like youthful kisses
    I love those leftovers too’.

    A delicious portrait of a relationship ‘season after season, still savory good’. And I love the photos!


  10. Jane Dougherty January 6, 2021 / 10:01 am

    What Glenn said. You wrote a mirror-image of the original poem, with your personal touch.


  11. robtkistner January 6, 2021 / 11:11 am

    This was and excellent piece and an engaging read Lillian — well written. Happy & Healthy New Year to you and yours. Here’s to writing wonderful poetry in 2021.


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