Lion: High Trump in the Jungle

The angry eyes do frighten me.
The mane, his crown, doth cause great fear,
and I recoil, my wish to flee.

The angry ayes do frighten me,
my voice, once loud, drowned out. His glee.
The king now rules, his roar severe.
The angry eyes do frighten me.
the main, his crown, doth cause great fear.


Poetry form is a TRIOLET, suggested by Frank who hosts Meet the Bar today at dVerse, the virtual pub for poets. A TRIOLET = 8 lines with iambic pentameter and an abaaabab rhyme scheme. If that’s not enough of a poetic sodoku for you: the 1st, 4th, and 7th lines must be the same; and the 2nd and 8th lines must be the same.

PHOTO taken yesterday at the incredible San Diego Zoo Safari Park. Yes, the lion was that close to me….but there was glass between us!

20 thoughts on “Lion: High Trump in the Jungle

  1. Frank Hubeny February 27, 2020 / 4:06 pm

    Very nice! You seemed to me to have written a perfect triolet and described that lion well.

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    • lillian February 27, 2020 / 4:09 pm

      Thank you, Frank. I always always struggle with forms. Guess I tried to follow it to literally…but it was a challenge!

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    • lillian February 27, 2020 / 4:12 pm

      Well….I usually dislike zoos but the San Diego Zoo, the San Diego Zoo Safari Park, and the National Zoo in Washington DC are accredited and exemplary for creating natural habitats (I know they’re not really), breeding, allowing animals to choose behaviors etc. The Safari Park was most amazing — out in the country side — plains, hills, mountains etc.
      BUT – I sure agree with you on the political side….and hoping November’s ballots will put him out to pasture so to speak!


      • Jane Dougherty February 27, 2020 / 4:49 pm

        Zoos exist for our pleasure not for any other reason. They send out the message that animals exist only to be looked at, that they have no rights of their own, and as long as there are a few specimens in zoos for kids to gawp at, who cares if there are none left in the wild? Let them look at baby trumps instead, throw them biscuits and watch them roll on their backs and show their tummies.


      • lillian February 27, 2020 / 5:14 pm

        Well….we’ll just agree to disagree about San Diego Zoo, their Safari Park Zoo, and the National
        Zoo. They repeatedly send out an entirely different message than the one you’ve mentioned here. Sadly, because of humanity’s encroachment on natural habitats that has already occurred and continues to occur, places like these work hard to continue species and sometimes take in animals who would otherwise be decimated. I believe it’s our responsibility to research or be aware of those institutions that are inhumane to the animals and not frequent them. I absolutely agree with you there.
        And oh how I hope the November elections turn the tide on the current occupant.
        Enough said. Except that I do enjoy reading your posts on dVerse, Jane! ❤️😊


  2. msjadeli February 27, 2020 / 4:32 pm

    Imagine if that was the other “lyin” that close to you. I like how you switched the words into metaphor.


  3. Raivenne February 27, 2020 / 5:05 pm

    “The angry ayes do frighten me,” Bravo!!

    Excellently done. I like how you used your words here.


  4. Glenn A. Buttkus February 27, 2020 / 5:09 pm

    I love your title; it colors the whole poem. We used a similar theme. I tried to write mine “literally”, and it is allegorical.


  5. sarahsouthwest February 27, 2020 / 5:13 pm

    I love the way you’ve used homophones here, very clever. Conjured up a blond mop of hair for me.

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  6. Beverly Crawford February 27, 2020 / 5:34 pm

    Well you took us to the zoo with your sodoku, and well done at that. I’m inclined to agree with you regarding the poetic form, and sodoku is gentle and kind compared to my description!!


  7. Mary (tqhousecat) February 27, 2020 / 6:46 pm

    The lion is magnificent from afar. Up close we sense his power and authority. It can be pretty terrifying! You described him well.


  8. kim881 February 28, 2020 / 2:45 am

    I’m not keen on zoos but I do love lions, being a Leo myself, and your close-up of that handsome lion is stunning, Lill! I like the way you captured (pun intended!) him in your triolet, and the play on words to compare him to your scary president.


  9. pvcann February 28, 2020 / 9:24 am

    The photo adds weight to the fear, or the awe for the lion, potent lines.


  10. Stine Writing February 28, 2020 / 1:30 pm

    That is fantastic. It really makes the reader sense the tranquility of the beast, with the underlying fear of its animal instincts.


  11. rothpoetry February 28, 2020 / 9:13 pm

    Beautiful Photos and the poem is great! That is one impressive lion. You should have been afraid of him! …by chance are there some hidden meanings in this one?? :>)


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