Tanka with polytoton

Shadowed moon flickers
on windblown cornstalk stubble.
Red fox stalks its prey,
hunting through snow covered field.
Hunter in wool cap takes aim.


Frank hosts dVerse tonight, the virtual pub for poets. We are to consider the polytoton: rhetorical repetition of words within a poem, but each time used in a different way (cornstalk and stalks; hunting and hunter).  
I’ve used the Tanka form: 5 line poem with 5, 7, 5, 7,  and 7 syllables.
Pub opens at 3 PM Boston time. Come join us! Image from Pixabay.com

33 thoughts on “Tanka with polytoton

  1. lifelessons October 24, 2019 / 5:27 pm

    Certainly one of the most beautiful of animals. Oh that the hunter had been left out of this one.

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    • lillian November 5, 2019 / 11:52 am

      I do so agree….but that last line seemed to just appear.


      • lifelessons November 5, 2019 / 2:04 pm

        It made the poem, of course. It appeared out of nowhere to completely alter the scene, as did the hunter.


  2. Glenn A. Buttkus October 24, 2019 / 6:58 pm

    You do a lot with the confines of a tidy tanka; two polyptotons as well. Any poem with foxes or crows thrills me.

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  3. Frank Hubeny October 24, 2019 / 7:21 pm

    I like the repeated use of “stalk” in your description of those two hunters in that field.

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    • lillian November 5, 2019 / 11:55 am

      Ah….many many years ago when we lived in the country, the surrounding fields were covered with left-over corn stalks, sticking up in the first small dustings of snow, somehow missed by the combines in harvest time.

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  4. Candace October 24, 2019 / 8:08 pm

    bravo! I love how the polytoton are so subtle – very effective.
    I just smack you in the face with mine. 😅

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    • lillian November 5, 2019 / 11:56 am

      Thank you, Candace. We’ve been gone to visit son and grandkids for about 5 days so I am slow to the reading 😦


  5. Beverly Crawford October 24, 2019 / 8:24 pm

    I like the stalking in the stalks. Masters the challenge well.

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  6. little learner October 25, 2019 / 1:53 am

    A beautiful tanka. I was so taken with your imagery I forgot all about the polytoton prompt and read the poem several times letting it wash over me.

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    • lillian November 5, 2019 / 11:57 am

      Oh, what a wonderful comment to read this morning. We’ve just returned from about a 6 day trip to visit son and family….so just now catching up.

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  7. Rob Kistner October 25, 2019 / 5:55 am

    Interestingi approach to the polyptoton here Lillian — I enjoyed this, 🙂 gorgeous photo of red fox! 🙂

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  8. kim881 October 25, 2019 / 6:22 am

    Well done, Lill, for your poloptoton tanka. You’ve packed so much into five lines. Such a sad ending, though.

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    • lillian November 5, 2019 / 11:59 am

      I agree….that hunter in wool cap just suddenly appeared in the last line 😦 We have just returned from a 6 day trip to son’s (three grandkids to enjoy plus one large labradoodle named Percy! — so am afraid I am very far behind. Will post today and start anew with my reading and replies. Apologies!

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    • lillian November 5, 2019 / 12:00 pm

      Thank you, Christine! Just returned from 6 day trip to see son and family and trying desperately to catch up! 😦


  9. memadtwo October 25, 2019 / 8:51 pm

    You’ve painted a vivid scene–right in the stillness before. (K)

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    • lillian November 5, 2019 / 12:01 pm

      Yep! I hope the fox sees the wool cap!


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