Bouquet Me

lillian

tulips dip and sway
seasonal ballet
scheming
upcoming soiree
daffodil foreplay
beaming
flower me I pray
utterly risque
gleaming


Written for dVerse, the virtual pub for poets. Today we’re asked to write a Lai: an old form of telling tales – a 9 line poem with an aabaabaab rhyme scheme where the a lines have 5 syllables and the b lines have 2 syllables. I give you a springtime tale of  love!  Pub opens at 3 PM Boston time. Come on over and imbibe some words! 

54 thoughts on “Bouquet Me”

  2. Victoria C. Slotto June 8, 2017 / 3:07 pm

    Oh thank you for the uplift! Everything thing turned gloomy here today so I was hoping for a bit of sunshine (which we have NOT been deprived of). So spoiled am I.

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  5. kim881 June 8, 2017 / 3:19 pm

    This is a treat, Lillian! My favourite spring flowers tied up in a neatly rhyming lai!

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    • lillian June 8, 2017 / 4:01 pm

      Ah, you’ve always been a romantic soul, right? 🙂

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  8. Glenn Buttkus June 8, 2017 / 3:53 pm

    Dancing flora–honeysuckle sunshine–warm smiles–tapping feet–the positive vibes emanate open-armed & light hearted ad infinitum; sigh.

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    • lillian June 8, 2017 / 4:03 pm

      Ah Glenn……..such a way with words you have. Me thinks you are a romantic at heart! 🙂

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    • lillian June 8, 2017 / 6:08 pm

      Always happy to hand out smiles!

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  11. Bev June 8, 2017 / 5:52 pm

    You bring grace and class to the challenge, Lillian. I’m afraid my “take” was the other end of the spectrum. I much enjoyed your poem.

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    • lillian June 8, 2017 / 6:10 pm

      Thank you so very much for your kind words. I really found it challenging to write a poem of substance in this form — so went with no punctuation and took it to the basics of lower case as well.

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    • lillian June 8, 2017 / 7:22 pm

      Smiling I am….with glass of chardonnay in hand. Will be reading tomorrow AM with hot steaming coffee — much better to focus with! 🙂

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      • jillys2016 June 8, 2017 / 7:52 pm

        My days look so much the same – coffee, until I switch to wine. (Sometimes I actually drink water in there, too.) 🙂

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  14. Charley June 8, 2017 / 7:18 pm

    (Fanning myself) Well, my my! Hmmm. Am I blushing? Fun stuff!

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  15. nosaintaugustine June 8, 2017 / 8:22 pm

    Naughty flowers! I love it. “Flower me I pray, Utterly risque” is a great line. Mine also took a turn for the bedroom.

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    • lillian June 9, 2017 / 6:08 am

      So glad you enjoyed. Getting my coffee now and then I’ll be reading. Looking forward to seeing yours.

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    • lillian June 9, 2017 / 6:16 am

      Thank you, Nan. I found this abbreviated form (syllable count) very difficult. Ended up taking out all punctuation and that “felt” better. Rhyme Zone also helps a lot — I looked for words that have lots of rhyming words and picked two (an a word and a b word) and then, list of words in hand, wrote. I’m sure that’s backwards — but I also am very challenged by rhyming. I think that’s one of the things I enjoy about dVerse — I’m “pushed” and learn new things — and everyone is so kind and positive. So — many thanks for your words here. I’ll be getting my morning elixir in a minute and then reading. Hope to see yours there! The prompt is open for quite a while.

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    • lillian June 9, 2017 / 6:18 am

      Thank you! I’m always up for a lovely dance. 😊

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  20. NJ June 9, 2017 / 3:16 am

    What a way to see the dance of daffodils in your words 🙂

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    • lillian June 9, 2017 / 6:18 am

      Those daffodils, the prelude to spring ❤️

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  21. Kathy Reed June 9, 2017 / 7:29 am

    Oh I love a soiree…here our spring flowers have withered and summer’s roses are blooming.;)

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    • lillian June 9, 2017 / 7:39 am

      …especially a spring soiree! 🙂 Glad you enjoyed. Yes — the tulips and daffodils appeared in Boston while we were away for a month so I missed them entirely. This had me at least seeing them in my mind’s eye 🙂

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  22. jerennazuto June 9, 2017 / 1:52 pm

    The rhyme is just wonderful and the poem itself is very beatiful. Very elegantly done.

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  23. Waltermarks June 9, 2017 / 4:32 pm

    Thank you for the dancing daffodils. Their Spring fling definitely makes the world a better place

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    • lillian June 12, 2017 / 2:43 pm

      Thank you! It is so fun to sometimes write things that are jolly and really positive! 🙂

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