you loved me
as I was you said
then dismembered me
your hands, your will
debased my sense of self
erased my core
left me sightless
looking for me
Hosting dVerse for Tuesday Poetics — a virtual pub for those who enjoy working with words and creating poetry. Today, I’m asking folks to find a sculpture that inspires them — and then to write in the voice of that sculpture — become either the artist who created the piece, or the subject of the sculpture. Don’t tell us about the sculpture, rather take on its voice. Come on over and see what others do — or how about joining us and lending your voice too?
lillian the home poet 
What a truly excellent poem for this prompt! It is an intriguing image indeed.
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Thank you — I’m so glad you enjoyed…..even though it is a bit on the dark side. But the sculpture is so…..questioning!
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Wow, this is an image that could spawn a thousand poetics; but hey, staring at any statue ( I love to photograph them) can conjure up torrents of poetic lines, right? Yours is perfect, rife with brevity & pain.
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Thank you, Glenn. I always appreciate your words — so very glad you enjoyed. It is an amazing sculpture, isn’t it? !
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You’ve captured the soul of this sculpture through you beautiful, and beautifully chosen, words. Lovely, Lillian.
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Thank you so much for your very kind words, Jo-Anne. So nice to see you here this afternoon! 🙂
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this poem breaks my heart, very moving
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Thanks for the response – it is a sadder and darker norm than I usually do.
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I was left with feelings of loss at this sculpture, as well, Lill. I love yours.
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Thank you — when I saw this sculpture, I knew I had to include it in the prompt. I do wonder what the real back story is on it!
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I had to reread this several times to let it sink in. It illustrates how we are all sculptures in a sense.
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Oh yes, in so many ways. Nurtured (molded), taught our words, taught how to respond in the face of anger, hope, love, despair, disappointment…..and not only by our parents and loved ones, but think of the influence of outside sources….what is that age old argument, nurture or nature?
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Ooh, I do enjoy a bit of dark! To be dismembered so…
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It is a bizarre sculpture that conjures up all sorts of possibilities!
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This was truly a wonderful and sad metaphor you weaved from the sculpture.
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Thank you Bjorn, for your very thoughtful and generous reply here. Truly appreciated.
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Sigh… you have captured the essence of this sculpture so beautifully ❤
Lots of love,
Sanaa
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Glad you enjoyed — an unusual sculpture — had to think about it awhile!
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How terribly sad but beautifully done Lillian.
I chose the same one but took a more positive approach, smiles ~
This is a very unique prompt and I think we can do it again with different kinds or sets of sculptures or art. Thanks for hosting.
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I’m enjoying seeing the art as well as reading the voices within the art! So interesting to see folks take on the person a of the subject or the artist. Will get over to read yours here in a bit. Yes – mine went a little dark so I did a second one from a lovely fountain statue we’d seen on a trip. Happy Tuesday!
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Oh, my friend
this seems especially poignant for the current times
powerful sorrow in a face stripped from its soul
your words, my friend – touching as salty tears
am:)
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yes — so much sorrow now. But love rises above hatred every time — it is though, so painful to watch.
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yes, I believe that too
in this respect, I love holding onto my childlike optimism 🙂
the pain is palpable
the pain is all so pointless
am:)
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Well, to be loved and then dismembered (in a metaphorical sense) by the same…that can conjure up some pretty dark scenarios for sure. Not unlike many relationships that end up faltering and becoming “dismembered”. You packed a punch with your few well chosen words!
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Wow! Dismembered! Perfect!
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Amazing sculpture, eh?
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I love the metaphor in your poem, Lillian. It’s true, a partner in a relationship can ‘dismember’ you when they should be nurturing you. At the same time the sculptor of the artwork in the image has deconstructed the traditional form but the artwork is still beautiful, as is your poem.
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Deconstruction — have not used that terms since my rhetorical studies day. Great word to apply here — and so glad you enjoyed the poem. It’s been so interesting to view all the sculptures folks have chosen….and then to watch them “become” the sculpture or the artist. A “deeper” way to appreciate art! 🙂
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the last two lines are chilling..oh so sad…a beautifully crafted poem…
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Thank you, Sumana!
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Perfect, raw and deeply felt!
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oh my….Yes – it’s been so interesting to see the connections folks have made with their sculpture of choice!
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True!
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A fitting poem for those going through a break-up or divorce…sometimes one tries to control another and suffocate their mate when they don’t stop. I live the voice of your lady.
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Cannot push “like” here — heartfelt feelings sent to you. Love, the living and the leaving, can be so very hard. I so appreciate your thoughts and honesty here. I think, in some ways, that is what poetry is and what it becomes — first the writer’s voice in some creative way and then as others read, it can be theirs — and sometimes in a very personal way.
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Thanks for this prompt, Lillian. There are many sculptures apparent around here since we began our “Renaissance”. Your piece so perfectly presents the sculpture captured in this photo! Impressive.
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Glad you enjoyed the prompt! It’s truly been fun to see all the art that has appeared — in marble, bronze and words! 🙂
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What your wrote was poignant.
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Thank you — always glad to see when people have a response to the words — means they become more than connected lines on a computer screen 🙂 Glad you enjoyed!
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That they do. That’s what this blogosphere does, virtually makes us a part of each other’s lives. And I think it is fantastic. 🙂
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Heartrending
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Thank you — And so glad you participated in the prompt. We’ve had so many different sculptures chosen….and poets taking on the voice of the subject or the artist — making the statues come alive.
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Yep, we’ve all known THAT guy. The poem and the image work so well together, really add depth and meaning to each other. It absolutely fitted the sculpture, but made me look at it so differently. Really moving.
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So glad you enjoyed. Many thanks for the kind words!
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Your concise and powerful words are a perfect match for this sculpture. The impact of facial expressions in art has always amazed me.
A wonderful prompt, Lillian. 🙂
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So glad you enjoyed the prompt. Yes — the face is incredibly expressive and then add shadow and highlights in the artist’s medium — or the coolness of slickened marble – it really is quite telling 😊
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A truly heart-breaking piece. Your words fit perfectly to the image. Great poem, Lillian!
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Thanks, Maria. So glad you enjoyed — and so very glad you participated in the prompt. You’ll find my words of appreciation on your post as well — Happy Thursday!
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Likewise Lillian! Happy to have joined this community of brilliant poets at dVerse ☺️
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An evocative poem and prompt, Lillian…thanks for posting (and hosting)!
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Thanks, Lynn. It’s been amazing reading all the posts for this prompt — went far beyond anything I imagined. The voices gave life to so much art! So very glad you participated! 🙂 Happy Thursday!
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The image you selected and to words you sculpted are a perfect description of the brokenness caused by abuse.
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Yes. Sadly so.
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Oh Lord.. the statue
of a human fAce erasED
And losT in GRAins of YesterFiElds..
so dry wiTh no Rains of SeNses
FeeLinGs to fAce AgaiN..
the hUman
test
oF Love..
reSunG.. reBrunG..
rE-DonE for LoVe AllONe..
wHere Blood and Flesh
coMeS to
StOne aLivE
renewEd.. So.. FReED..:)
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…where blood and flesh comes to stone alive, renewed, so freed……LOVELY poem within your words here, my friend!
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