He lived in the pink house, she in the white. They grew up together laughing, climbing the hillside, riding the school bus. No one was surprised when he proposed. It was quietly assumed. Seth and June.
Just days after the wedding, his unit was called. She wept and he promised to return.
Eight months of living with her folks. Skyping when possible, through static and frozen image. And now she sat, secret intact. Large belly pressed against the pane, a new life about to enter theirs. She waited for him to round the bend. Promise fulfilled and multiplied by two.
100 words. Β Photo Credit: Sandra Crook — basis for this week’s Friday Fictioneers flash fiction challenge by Rochelle Wisoff. Β
Beautiful. Such a moving last line.
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Thank you so much. I’m glad you like it and appreciate your comment!
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Beautiful.
I love how you can always create a story in my mind with so few words.
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Smiling I am.
Have a wonderful Thanksgiving!
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You do the same. Thank you.
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I’m glad that you didn’t kill off Seth.
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Here in the U.S., it’s almost Thanksgiving day and I was ready for a positive happy ending! π
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Happy Thanksgiving, Lillian!
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Dear Lillian,
I held my breath through the most of your hundred words hoping Seth would return. Thank you for a sweet and happy ending.
Shalom and happy Thanksgiving,
Rochelle
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Happy endings are the best — especially at Thanksgiving time π
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C- I wouldn’t change a thing. The tension was good without sacrificing the romance.
Happy Thanksgiving.
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ah romance……….nice to see it on a Thanksgiving story! π Thank your for your thoughtful reading and have a wonderful day!
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You as well.
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Lovely to see a happy ending.
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Well, after seeing all the comments, it appears that the happy ending was the twist! π So glad you liked it, Sandra.
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Oh, well done.
Even I got caught up in the general feel good here!
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Thank you so much for the compliment! So many times the feel good stories can be “sticky” — that red cherry cough syrupy sweet…..so if you got caught up here, then it means I’ve succeeded in having a happy ending that was somewhat of a twist and was one that readers actually hoped for rather than saw coming a mile away. At least, that’s my read on your reaction. So — in a nutshell, your comment made me feel good this Thanksgiving morn! Many thanks!
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I hope he comes home. I hope he lets everyone else do the same.
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He’s coming round the bend! Yes — prayers today for all our service men and women!
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No prayers for the one’s they’ve killed?
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Well of course….for all touched by strife . 100 words provide a glimpse into but two individuals touched by conflict and include hope for humanity in the symbolism of a babe about to be born and in Seth’s return.
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Such a wonderful end, that’s will get complete at Thanksgiving.. really a tender story
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So happy you like it!
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Such a beautiful tale of love and hope and sadness and joy…
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Thank you, Dale.
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Ohhh! Very palpable.
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Ah….great descriptive word!
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A beautiful story. C–I did see the pregnancy coming, but not the happy ending, which makes it a lovely conclusion to the good tension you built in these few words.
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Thanks so much for your thoughtful read. Really appreciate it and so glad you liked it!
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I’m so glad Seth was on his way home. I guess I love happy endings.
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Me too!
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Very positive. So many war tales end in the most obvious way – this didn’t.
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Thanks, Patrick. If you’ll read my About, you’ll see I’m a very positive person! π So glad you liked it!
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I am so glad it worked out for them. What a secret to keep! I can imagine the love these two share and the happiness and joy in their embrace when she comes running out of the house to greet him.
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So glad you enjoyed the story. From people’s reactions, it appears Seth and June came alive for many.
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They are the hope of dreams.
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Well done!
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Glad you liked it! So nice to see you here on my site – you’re always welcome!
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She kept it a secret? Now that is commitment to a surprise!
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Testament to her faith that he would come home π
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Very true. She is a brave woman. Great story.
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What a beautiful story, very moving.
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So happy you like it! Thank you.
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