Mountain Haiku

lillian

earth sheds detritus
clutter clutched in melting snow –
rivers cascade spring


Written for dVerse, the virtual pub for poets from across the globe where today, Paul is tending bar and asks us to write about rivers. Pub opens at 3 PM Boston time. Come river dance with us! 

56 thoughts on “Mountain Haiku”

    • lillian's avatar lillian March 21, 2017 / 9:50 am

      Thank you, Charlie. Photo is actually from our recent trip to New Zealand.

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  2. kanzensakura's avatar kanzensakura March 21, 2017 / 10:07 am

    Lovely haiku. The photo is beautiful. The haiku and the haiku complement each other beautifully. Well done!

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  4. Grace's avatar Grace March 21, 2017 / 12:33 pm

    Love that cascading spring ~

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    • lillian's avatar lillian March 23, 2017 / 8:45 am

      Still waiting for spring here..,,

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  5. Glenn Buttkus's avatar Glenn Buttkus March 21, 2017 / 3:06 pm

    Your beautiful brevity pays off big time–saying in haiku what I took two pages to touch upon, In 1977 I did a play in Sidney, stopping in New Zealand; always wanted to go back for an in depth visit; envious smile.

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    • lillian's avatar lillian March 23, 2017 / 8:46 am

      New Zealand is truly gorgeous! Trip of a lifetime 😊

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  6. paulscribbles's avatar paul scribbles March 21, 2017 / 3:11 pm

    I agree with Glenn here…the brevity adds depth and beauty. The combination of Haiku and photo are superb. Thank You for honoring the prompt so eloquently.

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    • lillian's avatar lillian March 23, 2017 / 8:50 am

      Always good to be joyful😊❤

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    • lillian's avatar lillian March 23, 2017 / 8:51 am

      In Boston, spring is being bashful and ole man winter is still a curmudgeon!

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    • lillian's avatar lillian March 23, 2017 / 8:54 am

      Thanks, Kim! Your words bring to mind my mom’s very thorough spring cleaning habit. We had to empty every kitchen cupboard and clean it, scrub it, wipe down contents etc. She was a bit obsessive with it, but then she also ironed my father’s boxer shorts! 😉🙃

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      • kim881's avatar kim881 March 23, 2017 / 9:04 am

        I’m a bit slapdash on the cupboard cleaning but I admit to ironing bath and tea towels, underwear and anything else that can be ironed – I love ironing while listening to the radio! 🙂

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  12. sanaarizvi's avatar sanaarizvi March 21, 2017 / 4:57 pm

    Gorgeous, gorgeous, gorgeous ❤️

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    • lillian's avatar lillian March 23, 2017 / 8:56 am

      Yes….and the crocus and daffodils and tulips and forsythia … 🌸🌹😊

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  14. whimsygizmo's avatar whimsygizmo March 21, 2017 / 5:32 pm

    The sounds in here are fantastic, Lill. Well done.

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    • lillian's avatar lillian March 23, 2017 / 8:56 am

      Thank you, De. Glad you enjoyed!

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  16. Gina@alifelesslived's avatar Singledust March 21, 2017 / 6:16 pm

    this was lovely to read! living in a tropical country we seldom think how the river is formed, I love the link to how it came to be. Snow being something I think about a lot!

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  17. rosross's avatar rosross March 21, 2017 / 8:37 pm

    I am full of admiration for those who can write in this form.

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    • lillian's avatar lillian March 23, 2017 / 8:59 am

      I enjoy both the haiku, and when three lines won’t do, the seven line tanka is fun too. I enjoy the challenge of brevity. Sometimes it works and sometimes not! Glad you enjoyed this one.

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    • lillian's avatar lillian March 23, 2017 / 9:01 am

      Yes…and although the calendar reads spring, we’re still waiting here in Boston.

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  20. Rosemary Nissen-Wade's avatar Rosemary Nissen-Wade March 21, 2017 / 11:18 pm

    Beautiful haiku and beautiful photo.

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  22. maria's avatar maria March 22, 2017 / 7:49 am

    Beautiful haiku that goes with a gorgeous photo!

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    • lillian's avatar lillian March 23, 2017 / 9:03 am

      So glad you enjoyed, Maria. Now we just need for Boston’s weather to match the calendar word “spring!”

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  24. Laura Bloomsbury's avatar Laura Bloomsbury March 22, 2017 / 1:43 pm

    clutter clutched – really grasps the readers imagination

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  25. katiemiafrederick's avatar katiemiafrederick March 22, 2017 / 5:59 pm

    MounTain
    River
    SpRings
    Debris
    In
    WaterfALLs
    of Detritus
    as you
    DancE
    and SinG
    thAT iN Haiku way..
    aS alWayS iN.. liFe/LoVe
    TRumps
    Detritus
    as Poetic
    Prompt oF aRT
    cOmes liGht from dARk..
    oTheR than thAT.. Hi Lillian..;)

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    • lillian's avatar lillian March 23, 2017 / 9:06 am

      So good to see you this morning, Katie! We’re still waiting for spring weather in Boston. March is a fickle month😳

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    • lillian's avatar lillian March 23, 2017 / 9:06 am

      Thanks, Hank. I enjoyed the prompt!

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