Oh, Henry! You’ve caught me
be-twix and be-tween.
Passion whet by champagne,
and Kit Kat Club ambience.
Desire kindled by kindness.
Your patience to consummate
pledge your troth, to wed
and only then to bed.
Until my evening gown mishap.
Bared breast revealed,
milky way to pale mounds
meant to share in nuptial bliss.
When moonlight shafts
soften look of aging skin,
light passion’s fire,
scorch through satin linens.
But shocked I am.
Your snickers, chuckles,
leering eyes, pupils wide.
Your lust apparent, unleashed.
Tongue swiftly swipes your lips
sweat beads drip down furrowed brow.
You, most definitely,
are not my Mr. Good Bar.
Fifth Avenue class and demeanor
slipped away as if a mask.
I see you now, the real you.
As far out of possibilities
as aliens from planet Mars.
Bar or not, I sand beside this stool,
proud woman, intelligent,
genteel and steeled.
Beware sir, I am not
a pay day or pay by night
loose female, giving on demand.
I am not that kind.
I thought you were different.
And so I leave you sir,
clutching cloth to breast
virture intact.
Self respect intact,
yesterday, today,
and through many morrows.
Until some partner shall appear,
unconditional love apparent.
And we shall reveal to one another
our feelings, wishes, and regrets.
Our every view into our very souls.
I’m hosting Tuesday Poetics at dVerse today, the virtual pub for poets, and we’re brand name noodling! I’ve given folks three categories: candy bars, cereals, and perfumes. I’ve listed at least sixteen products in each category. Folks are to choose ONE category, and write a poem that includes at least TWO of the product names within that category. . . using them as just words in the poem.
I’ve chosen to used the candy bar list: Oh, Henry!, Chuckles, Kit-Kat, Snickers, Milky Way, Mr. Goodbar, Mars Bar, 5th Avenue, Pay Day, Mounds, Twix, Charleston Chew, Butterfinger, Baby Ruth, Krackle, and 3 Muskateers. I used the first 11 in this poem.
Nice use of all those words. Apparently “Desire kindled by kindness” may not always bring one a Mr. Good Bar.
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Smiling I am at your reply here! Ah….the sweetness of candy bards….er, I mean bars 🙂
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Amazing Lill! You’ve used 11 items from the list of sweets and made me chuckle and snicker at the ‘evening gown mishap’! I imagine this story as a black and white silent movie.
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Oh yes…….that would be exactly the period for it! 🙂 And a lot of rolling eyes! 🙂
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Which actress would you choose to play the bare-breasted flapper?
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If I could put a more modern actress in the role, slip her back in time to those days, the first one who comes to mind is Goldie Hawn. Although she’d be “ditzy” and not elegant. You’d need a combination I think….perhaps Lillian Gish? 🙂
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Oops… mine could almost be written from the opposite perspective… no Mr Good bar actually… ha. Love all the names you have managed to include… perfumes were much easier to include.
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Well….this guy turned out not to be her Mr. Goodbar…..his true character popped out with her dress malfunction!
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This is silent film stuff and the I imagine the chocolate bar wrappers dropped on the floor and the jaws chewing as they watch 🙂
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Smiling I am at your reply! 🙂
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🙂
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Lillian! You took this to perfection. A lovely tale with a good morale; all revealed only within true love. Love it!
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Thanks, Vivian. Glad you enjoyed! It was a fun one to write. I’m thinking I may do a second and give the cereals a try as no one has done that yet. I’d get some kix out of it 🙂
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Lol!
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Scrumptiously Sweet! 😎🥀😎🥀😎🥀😎🥀
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Thanks!
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This is EPIC!!
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Wow! Now that’s a comment! Many thanks 🙂
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This is fantastic!
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Oh my…..thank you! 🙂
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Love it! 🙂
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So glad. Really fun to work with these. Didn’t know how the prompt would go — but it’s been fun to read the results.
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Oh so brilliantly done! And saw what you did there with the Mars Bar . I adore it!
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Glad you caught that. Fun to work with all these words 🙂 Glad you enjoyed!
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A great poem and a great story! Love It !!
Dwight
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Thanks, Dwight!
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A great story poem and you have incorporated so many delicious words! A fun prompt.
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Glad you enjoyed! 🙂
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I guess he was not Mr Goodbar! Sad that many like that could exist! I commend you for your use of these sweet additions!
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Yes….Victorian Age, age of the Silent Movie, 50s, 60s, any decade….it can be a challenge to find Mr. Goodbar 🙂
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Her virtue saved by sweet metaphors!!!
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Smiling I am at your comment. Glad you enjoyed!
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How perfectly wonderful!
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Thank you, Annell!
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You went to town with this one Lillian! “Oh Henry!” what a great opening and I love the Kit Kat club and not my Mr Good Bar…and so on 🙂
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So fun to play with words. I really didn’t know how folks would respond to this prompt….but there are so many good writes and so many really seem to have had a fun time with it! 😉
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Wonderful noodling, Lillian! …and the lady leaves, virtue (spelling?) intact 🙂
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Thanks, Lynn. When I wrote up this prompt last week….I had no idea how folks would respond…or what I would even do with it. But so many have risen to the challenge and had some fun with words. I’m always happy to hand out smiles 🙂
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this is most mouthwatering Lilian! So clever the way you melted these chocolate bars together – Kit-Kat club especially
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Ah, thank you, Laura. It was a fun one to write.
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This may have been a fun prompt but you took the poetry seriously and created both story and character. And, your talented use of Mr Good Bar was particularly fabulous.
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Thanks so much Jo-Anne. When I first wrote this prompt, I had no idea what folks would do with it or what I would do with it! But it looks like lots of people had fun with it….it’s been a pleasure reading all the posts. So glad you enjoyed this one – the prompt and my post! 🙂
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kaykuala
And we shall reveal to one another
our feelings, wishes, and regrets.
Our every view into our very souls.
There seems to be a high level of understanding between them and wanting to please each other. Great close Lillian!
Hank
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Thanks, Hank. I went narrative on this one……these last lines seem to me to be the idea of unconditional love, right? 🙂 Glad you enjoyed.
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great use of the candybars. love the narrative poem, the different emotions she tumbled through
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