Film Noir, Take 43

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Blissful dream deteriorates.
Breeze flickers, curls, skips, dances.
Spice jar creaks, spills open.
Greenish ghosts spring free,
grinning, shimmering, twisting.
Breathless whisper sounds echo.
Clouds balloon, bubble, spark storm.
Drizzled rose-red blood-shadows
pepper dawn. Hope melts.
Journeyman giggling fearfully,
leaves scarred.
Cue still lull.

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Grace hosts dVerse today. We must include the word “creak” in a Quadrille: poem of exactly 44 words, sans title.  Quadrille Mondays occur every other week. Each quadrille series includes 44 Mondays: a different prompt each time. We need only include that week’s prompt in our poem. This post includes all 43 words given in the series thus far: creak, hope, spice, free, bliss, dream, fear, flicker, pepper, dance, bubble, grin, lull, melt, shimmer, twist, skip, green, breeze, spill, rose, journey, jar, leaves, open, shadow, cloud, spark, cue, breath, scar, curl, whisper, dawn, ghost, giggle, drizzle, still, echo, sound, storm, spring, and balloon.  Bar opens at 3 PM Boston time.  Come join us!

46 thoughts on “Film Noir, Take 43”

    • lillian October 23, 2017 / 3:35 pm

      YES! Would love to see your take with all the words. I thought “creak” would be easy to add but it’s the removal of one word AND fitting in “creak” that becomes tricky. Only one of my own words left: “deteriorates.” So — will have to really shuffle next time. I live in fear that someone will have the last word be something like “pickle!” LOL

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    • lillian October 23, 2017 / 3:36 pm

      Thank you, Toni. Just one of “my own words” left: “deteriorates.” We’ll see if I can finish the challenge next time! Glad you enjoyed.

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  5. Grace October 23, 2017 / 3:05 pm

    Well done Lillian ~ Love the film noir darkness ~

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    • lillian October 23, 2017 / 3:36 pm

      Thank you, Grace. Will be kind of sad to leave my Film Noir Series with word 44. However, to eliminate my own last word “deteriorates” and add the 44th….we’ll see.

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  8. kim881 October 23, 2017 / 3:12 pm

    I love your films noirs, Lill! I especially like the creaking spice jar!

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    • lillian October 23, 2017 / 3:39 pm

      Well….each one comes out a bit differently…who is grinning and giggling…adding the Journeyman a few words ago. Next time, my last word “deteriorates” will disappear (it had a short run of just this post) and there will be none of “me” in Take 44. We’ll see………

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  9. Glenn Buttkus October 23, 2017 / 3:12 pm

    Another sterling work, anther poetic wonder & triumph. You had me at “pepper dawn”. I did one last week with all the words; surprising how many combos one can find in the hive of words.

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    • lillian October 23, 2017 / 3:41 pm

      I don’t think I saw yours, Glenn? I was out with an extreme allergy in my eyes…couldn’t really do much reading or writing for almost a week. Will have to go back to your site to find it….
      It’s really a challenge…not so much to fit in the new word but to remove another “of mine” that doesn’t “belong there” or “fit” into the 44 anymore. As in, next time, all 44 words will be somebody else’s! LOL

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  13. Feelings and Freedom October 24, 2017 / 8:41 am

    Awesome! A quadrille using all 43 words! It flowed so well. I am waiting for week 44 to try out with all words. I tried earlier with 38 words ;)But this one is amazing.

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    • lillian October 25, 2017 / 7:43 am

      So glad you enjoyed. We’ll see if there’s a Finale to the Film Noir Series! Only one word to delete: “deteriorates” — when the final 44th word is given. The trick is eliminating all our own words!

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  14. kaykuala (@hankkaykuala) October 24, 2017 / 10:00 am

    Spice jar creaks, spills open.
    Greenish ghosts spring free,

    A tinge of humor cleverly done!

    Hank

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    • lillian October 25, 2017 / 7:43 am

      Yep — the ghosts turned green in Take 43 and who knew they lived in a Spice Jar? 🙂

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    • lillian October 25, 2017 / 7:44 am

      Thank you! Glad you enjoyed.

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  16. Mish October 24, 2017 / 12:47 pm

    Love your title and you found a way to collaborate those quadrille words naturally to create an eerie vibe!

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    • lillian October 25, 2017 / 7:44 am

      The ghosts turned green for Take 43 and I discovered this time round, that they’ve been living in a spice jar! 🙂

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  18. ghostmmnc October 24, 2017 / 6:48 pm

    Amazing! You’re so creative to have used all the words so far, and it makes a really cool story/poem! 🙂

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    • lillian October 25, 2017 / 7:45 am

      Just in time for halloween…….so be careful when you take out your spices on the 31st! 🙂

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  21. vidyatiru October 24, 2017 / 11:22 pm

    journeyman giggling fearfully and pepper storm!! loved reading every line though.. and you make it look so easy – using all the words!

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    • lillian October 25, 2017 / 7:47 am

      Glad you enjoyed. We’ll see if there’s a finale with word 44…and if the journeyman still travels in his dreams / nightmares!

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